Thursday, 13 August 2015

Feedback and Sharing

We have been sharing our narrative writing with others so that we can give and receive feedback. We have been using two medals and a mission and have been really trying to focus on specific narrative features when giving feedback.

Here is some of the feedback Sylvia received from Alicia and Athens.  
Great work you three!

Dear Dairy

So I woke up this morning to get ready for school until I went for a shower, and guess what came out of the shower gummy bears at first I was like” you're just wasting my time” then I was like “mmmm gummy bears!” So I thought I’ll skip the shower and brush my teeth until I turned on the tap and coins started to come out and I started think how am I  going to get to school if I can’t get ready. After that I was like forget it I’ll just brush my hair, put on my uniform and eat breakfast. As soon as I got to school people started to stare, point and talk about me because I looked ugly!

Story By Sylvia


  1. Hi Room 9,
    I like the way you are sharing your ideas and giving each other feedback.
    I also like the way you guys are writing a specific narrative.

  2. Malo e lelei Cerenity
    Thank you for the comment, we have been doing this activity called two medals in a mission where you have to write feedback on other people's stories. First we had to share your narrative writing then the feedbacking begun. Have you tried doing two medals in a mission at your school ?

  3. Kia ora Room 9,

    Thank you for sharing your narrative writing Sylvia. I like the feedback that Athens and Alicia have given you as it shows what you have done well. I wonder how you might find what your next steps are.

    Mrs Krausse


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